Movies cut

[紫陌]

Movies cut

Old money changes to new visa card.
Beauty sky fulls of red bloods.
Such as this kind of people.
Step by step with their mind's clean.
Like the movies cut day by day never the end.


舊鈔票換成了新的信用卡
美麗天空充滿了紅色鮮血
如此人們
整齊步伐驅使心智的清淨
日子像極電影剪輯從未完結

[余學林]

一陣子不見紫陌（是我比較懶惰），有一個關於詩整體的建議，就是詩句可以不必再一句一句地寫，可以在斷行上多做些變化。以一百零一首的拙作來打比方：

Psychopath they may say,
But this is the path chosen to pass the day.
In front of a mirror, a common scene,
One person, practicing psittacism,
Two different farces no one has been.

Beauty sky fulls of red bloods.

Beautiful

Like the movies cut day by day never the end.

Day by day like the movie cuts that never end.

Koala.Y謹上

[紫陌]

koala的建議很受用，我還是多多練習才是。
英文詩真的很深奧啊~~~

[瑞泰]

如此人們/
整齊步伐驅使心智的清淨/
日子像極電影剪輯從未完結/

日子，不就是黑夜與白天的互換
要完結只好等生命結束了