森林之歌與一支紅筆Chpter1-2

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“Are you a real homosexual or a bi-sexual?”Garrick asked me at the computer classroom in Global Village Organization,our English cram school classroom.
"妳是真的同志還是雙性?"傑在我們的補習班-地球村英語的電腦教室問我。
“How and why could you ask me this, boy?”I was surprised in my heart but at the same time,I feel this strange boy’s smile is a gift God gave to me.
"你怎麼可以這樣子問我這個問題?男孩?"我在內心相當的驚訝,但是同時,我感覺這個陌生的男孩的微笑,像是上帝給我的禮物。
I always like Garrick’s smile.
我總是喜歡傑的微笑。
“Well,I am a bi-.”I told him a truth,either.
"嗯,我是雙-。"我也告訴他是事實。
“Yeah! Do you know? Sister Shelly,I am a homosexual!”Garrick cheers up.
"耶!你知道嗎?學姊,我是個男同志耶!"傑歡呼起來。
I was not angry,really. I could feel something is melt in my heart very slightly in my mind.
我真的不生氣,我覺得甚麼東西在我的內心已經輕輕的融化了。
After that time,this strange boy has ever been in my heart.His handsome smile melt my heart,with his eyes,his eyes are like clear blue sky.
在這之後,這位陌生男孩已經留在我的心裡面。他俊俏的微笑融化了我的心,與他的眼睛,一起。他的眼睛像是湛藍的天空。
The truth is that Garrick’s first female lover is me.This truth I realized at the time he left me totally.He left me his cell-phone,but afterwards he never reply to me.
事實是傑的第一次女性戀人是我。這個事實是他完全的離開我之後,我才了解。他留下他的手機號碼給我,但是之後,他完全沒有回應我。
小小校正
雙性戀應是bisexual
有些英文文法可以再嚴僅些
口語英文創作其實對文法並不嚴格
能嘗試英文寫作是很棒的

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